I'm not a poetry person, mainly because poetry is hard. But I think it had a nice flow to it. The use of the word "shroud" seemed a bit odd since that word usually has a heavy connotation to it. I think if it had been shorter it would have been better. Sometimes less is more.
A shroud is a fabric used to envelop an embalmed corpse or in your example it means to obscure something. This poem was trying to convey a sense of serenity and enlightenment so the continued use of shroud seemed to be in opposition to the theme.
I’m so poetry-ignorant I still don’t know what a stanza is. Take my vote with a block of salt.
I'm not sure either, wasn't he one of the guys from Seinfeld?
I'm not a poetry person, mainly because poetry is hard. But I think it had a nice flow to it. The use of the word "shroud" seemed a bit odd since that word usually has a heavy connotation to it. I think if it had been shorter it would have been better. Sometimes less is more.
Thanks! Maybe I'll do a haiku next.
Interesting point about "shroud". Is that a word you would only expect in a negative sense? (like "shrouded in darkness")
A shroud is a fabric used to envelop an embalmed corpse or in your example it means to obscure something. This poem was trying to convey a sense of serenity and enlightenment so the continued use of shroud seemed to be in opposition to the theme.
I see… that is a little dark.
I’m sorry. I was being too negative. Especially since I couldn’t write a good poem if my life depended on it…
No worries! I was the one who posted the corpse cloth reference, apparently 🫣