Kambalda’s Ashes
Where Lies Burn and Water Kills
The Dust That Doesn’t Settle
Western Australia, 1992
The road into Kambalda wasn’t a road so much as a scar, red dirt bleeding into the horizon. Emmett Cale’s ’78 Holden rattled like a death rattle, its suspension shot from 500 klicks of Nullarbor nothingness. He passed a sun-blistered sign: KAMBALDA – POP. 1,203. Someone had scratched off the *3*. Emmett didn’t blame them.
Marlu’s Diner was where it always was—hunkered between a shuttered post office and a pub called The Last Chance, though everyone knew the real last chance had left on a Greyhound in ’85. Emmett ordered a coffee. The waitress, a gaunt woman with a nicotine stain for a voice, slid him a mug.
“$4.50.”
“For coffee?”
“For the water.” She jerked her chin at a handwritten sign: BOILED ONLY. $2 SURCHARGE.
Emmett sipped. It tasted like licking a battery. “Harlan Cale. Where’d they bury him?”
The woman’s laugh turned into a cough. “Ain’t you heard? They don’t bury suicides here. Dumped his ashes down Newmont’s emergency shaft.”
The salvage yard was a junkyard masquerading as a business. CALE’S SALVAGE – CASH FOR SCRAP! The CASH had been spray-painted over with CRAP. Emmett kicked open the office door. Dust motes swirled in the light slicing through bullet holes in the tin roof. A fridge hummed in the corner, its door propped shut with a crowbar. Inside: a six-pack of Emu Bitter, a jar of Vegemite, and a .38 revolver.
Harlan’s handwriting on the lid: For emergencies. Or Tuesdays.
Emmett cracked a beer. The gun went into his waistband.
The Charger sat under a tarp behind the shed, a ’68 Valiant Charger with a roo-bar bent like a drunk’s grin. Emmett yanked the tarp off. The gas cap was welded shut.
“He ever drive it?”
Emmett turned. Lydia Reyes leaned against a rusted grader, her arms crossed. Late 50s, maybe. Hair dyed black as a mining shift, roots the color of ash.
“Drove it once,” she said. “Brought me here. Tried to kiss me. I kneed him in the balls.”
“Romantic.”
“He cried. Then he laughed. Said it was the most alive he’d felt in years.” She lit a Winfield, the smoke curling around a scar on her collarbone. “You gonna ask why I’m here?”
“You gonna tell me?”
She tossed him a bolt. Left-handed threads. “Check the glovebox.”
The bolt fit the Charger’s gas cap. Inside, a hollow compartment. No ledger. No manifesto. Just a dented Zippo (H + L, ’79) and a cassette labeled For Em.
Emmett played it in the Holden.
“...if you’re hearing this, I lost. Newmont owns the cops, the clinic, the water. Even owns the damn dust. But the Charger’s got a secret. Siphoned methane from the old Nickel West vents. Turn the key, strike a match, and—”
A clatter. A wet cough. “Hell. You’ll figure it out.”
That night, Emmett drank at The Last Chance. The barman doubled as the undertaker. “Two-for-one special. Coffin or Coopers?”
The miners played pool with a warped cue. Talked in shorthand:
“Heard Baz’s kid’s in Perth. Leukemia.”
“Better than here.”
“His missus left.”
“Smart sheila.”
A man with a face like a pickaxe handle sidled up. Deputy Rollins, 25 going on 50.
“Sheriff says g’day.”
“Tell him to fuck himself.”
Rollins smiled, all nicotine and bad decisions. “He’d prefer you do it in person.”
The sheriff’s office smelled like sweat and Samboy chips. Moss sat with his boots on the desk, watching Wheel of Fortune on a rabbit-eared TV.
“Harlan’s ledger,” he said, not looking up.
“Ate it.”
“Funny. Newmont wants it.”
“Newmont can suck my arse.”
Moss sighed. “You know how many kids in this town got rashes? How many wives miscarry? I do. I sign the death certs.” He tossed Emmett a water bottle. The liquid inside was the color of urine. “Drink that, and we’ll talk.”
Emmett unscrewed the cap. The stench hit him first—sweet, chemical, wrong.
Moss grinned. “Bottoms up.”
The Lies That Stick to Your Boots
The Nickel West mine vents exhaled methane in low, toxic sighs. Emmett crouched in the pre-dawn dark, a jerrycan in hand, siphoning gas from the Charger’s gutted tank. Harlan’s grand rebellion amounted to six liters of fumes and a Zippo that wouldn’t spark.
Lydia found him there, her shadow stretching long in the milky light. She tossed him a meat pie wrapped in grease-stained paper. “Breakfast.”
“Poisoned?”
“Only if you count the cheese.” She nodded at the jerrycan. “He tried that too. ’87. Flooded the vents, nearly suffocated Shift B.”
“Didn’t stop Newmont.”
“Nothin’ stops Newmont. Slows ’em, maybe. Like pissin’ on a bushfire.”
The diner’s water surcharge had gone up to $3. Tammy, the waitress, poured Emmett coffee with hands that trembled. A rash crawled up her wrists, angry and wet.
“Seen the doc?” he asked.
“Newmont doc.” She snorted. “Said it’s eczema. Gave me cream that burns like a bastard.”
Baz, the pickaxe-faced miner, slid into the booth. His breath smelled like Jim Beam and despair. “Heard you’re Harlan’s brother. Here to play hero?”
“Here to drink coffee.”
Baz leaned in. “Heroes get dead here. Harlan. Johnny Walsh. That blackfella kid, Jari—tried to block a drill rig last year. ‘Accidental’ crush injury.” He made air quotes with scarred fingers. “They hosed him off the bit.”
Emmett’s knuckles whitened around the mug. “Why tell me?”
“So you know what you’re up against.” Baz dropped a crumpled photo on the table—a girl, maybe eight, gap-toothed and grinning. “My niece. Rashes turned septic. Perth hospital wants ten grand up front.” He stood, joints popping. “Newmont pays better’n God.”
Deputy Rollins pulled Emmett over on the Kambalda-Kalgoorlie Road. No siren—just lights flashing in the rearview like a lazy threat.
“Boot.”
Emmett popped it. The jerrycan sloshed.
Rollins sniffed. “Methane. Cute.” He lit a smoke, offering the pack. Emmett declined. “Harlan tried that too. Know what happened?”
“Enlighten me.”
“Sheriff made him drink a liter of mine water. As a ‘joke.’” Rollins blew smoke at the flies circling his hat. “Harlan pissed blood for a week. You ain’t got the stomach.”
“You do?”
Rollins’ smile didn’t reach his eyes. “I got a sister in Perth. Newmont pays her rent.” He slammed the boot. “Switch to diesel. Burns cleaner.”
The Charger wouldn’t start. Emmelt kicked the tyre, swearing. Lydia watched from the grader, smoking.
“Fuel pump’s rooted,” she said.
“You’re helpful.”
“I’m a realist.” She flicked ash. “Harlan’s ledger’s in the mine. Level 3, locker 12. Combo’s 34-15-9.”
Emmett stared. “How’d you—”
“I was his mistake.” She ground the cig under her boot. “His words, not mine.”
The mine elevator groaned like a dying man. Level 3 stank of sweat and ammonium nitrate. Locker 12 was dented, its combo rusted.
34-15-9.
Inside: a ledger, a stack of love letters (Lydia – You’re the only clean thing here), and a VHS tape labeled Newmont ‘83 – DO NOT COPY.
Emmett pocketed it. The lights flickered.
“Shift change,” a voice said.
Sheriff Moss stood in the doorway, thumbs hooked in his belt. A water bottle dangled from his pinkie. “Thirsty?”
The Dust That Chokes
The VHS tape hissed like a dying man’s breath in the backroom of The Last Chance. Emmett and Lydia hunched over a relic TV, watching grainy footage: Newmont execs in hard hats laughing as they rigged a pressure gauge. A voice off-camera: “Who cares if the seals blow? Cheaper to bury ‘em than fix ‘em.”
Lydia stabbed the stop button. “Proof. But who the fuck’s left to care?”
Emmett tossed the ledger onto the bar. Names, dates, payouts. Every soul in Kambalda had a price. “Jari’s mob. They care.”
She snorted. “The kid’s dead.”
“His mum ain’t.”
Jari’s mother, Nya, sat cross-legged in the red dirt outside her humpy, grinding warrigal greens into paste. She didn’t look up as Emmett approached. “Whitefella ghosts don’t interest me.”
“Your boy’s on that tape.” Emmett dropped the VHS at her feet. “They called him ‘collateral.’”
Nya’s hands stilled. “What you want?”
“A distraction. Tonight.”
Her eyes flicked to the mine’s floodlights. “Dust storm coming. Good day to bury secrets.”
The Charger coughed to life, its methane tank jury-rigged with a frayed ignition wire. Lydia slapped the hood. “It’ll blow halfway there.”
“That’s the point.” Emmett tossed her the Zippo. “Light it at the main gate. Run like hell.”
“And you?”
“Gonna make sure the whole country watches.”
She hesitated, then kissed him—hard, quick, a punctuation mark, not a sentence. “Don’t die.”
Deputy Rollins intercepted Emmett at the mine’s service entrance. His revolver trembled. “Sheriff’s got snipers on the rigs.”
“Move.”
“My sister—”
“Fuck your sister!” Emmett shoved past. “Your kid niece’s got sores down her throat from Newmont’s water. You wanna lick their boots? Do it. But don’t pretend it’s for family.”
Rollins’ breath hitched. He tossed Emmett his keys. “Service elevator. Goes straight to the comms tower.”
The storm hit as Lydia sparked the Charger. Flames licked the methane tank, then whoomp—a fireball lit the night. Newmont’s alarms wailed. Guards sprinted toward the gate, away from Emmett scaling the comms tower.
He spliced the VHS feed into Newmont’s satellite uplink. Live to every TV in Perth.
Sheriff Moss found him first.
“Hero shit, Cale?” Moss aimed his .44. “Nobody’s watchin’.”
Behind him, the mine’s lights flickered. Then died.
Nya’s voice crackled over the PA, hijacked: “They poisoned your children. Lied to your wives. Look at the screens.”
In the town hall, the VHS played. In living rooms, bars, the clinic. Baz’s niece pointed at the TV: “That’s Uncle Johnny!”
Moss fired. Emmett lunged. The bullet tore through his shoulder as he tackled Moss over the railing.
They fell.
Emmett woke to silence. The storm had choked the mine in red haze. Nya crouched beside him, pressing a wad of chewed greens to his wound.
“Moss?”
“Dust took him.” She nodded at the comms tower, its antenna snapped like a spine. “Your message got out. Feds are coming.”
“Lydia?”
Nya pointed. Across the compound, the Charger smoldered, a carcass of twisted metal. Lydia stood over it, grinning.
“Told you not to die.”
Epilogue
One week later:
Newmont’s execs sat in a Perth courtroom, squirming under headlines: COMPANY TOWN, COMPANY GRAVE.
Deputy Rollins’ body was found in his sister’s flat, a bullet in his temple and a note: PAID IN FULL.
Nya’s mob blockaded the mine, warrigal greens sprouting in the poisoned soil.
Emmett stood at the salvage yard, tossing Harlan’s Zippo into a drum fire. Lydia revved a stolen Newmont ute, gunning for the highway.
“Coming?”
He watched the flames. “Nah.”
She drove. He stayed.
The dust never settled. But sometimes, it remembered.
Thank you!
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Prompt: Write a story. Make it smart, specific, full of living and believable details, with a narrator displaying specific opinions and inner thought. Finally, the story must be expanded into a 3000-word two-scene short story. Don't write that story yet, just give an outline. (the 2 scenes will be divided into a total of 6 parts)Outline for a Two-Scene Short Story (6 Parts Total)
Working Title: The Spark in the Ashes
Scene 1: The Pact (1,500 words)
Setting: A sprawling, industrial-fantasy city, where towering brass spires pierce smog-filled skies. The dominant species are Luminari, humanoid beings with bioluminescent veins, ruled by a technocratic council.
Part 1: The Reluctant Scholar
Narrator: Dr. Kael Veyra, a cynical Luminari historian with a mechanical prosthetic arm (result of a lab accident).
Details: Kael sifts through archives in the soot-stained Chromatic Library, hunting for evidence of the Ashborn, extinct winged creatures said to harness volcanic energy.
Inner Conflict: Kael resents the council’s erasure of pre-industrial history, fearing they’ve weaponized Ashborn relics. Flashback to his mentor’s disappearance after questioning the council.
Inciting Incident: Kael discovers a coded journal hinting at a surviving Ashborn egg in the Ember Wastes (a quarantined volcanic zone).
Part 2: The Stranger’s Offer
New Character: Jara Nix, a scarred human smuggler with a grudge against the council. She intercepts Kael, offering passage to the Wastes in exchange for retrieving a “family heirloom” (later revealed to be a weapon).
Tension: Kael distrusts Jara’s motives but needs her airship. Their banter reveals class divides: Kael’s intellectual elitism vs. Jara’s street pragmatism.
Worldbuilding: The pair navigate a black-market bazaar where Luminari aristocrats trade illegal tech. Kael notices council spies tracking them.
Part 3: Into the Wastes
Journey: Aboard Jara’s rickety airship, The Mourning Star, Kael deciphers the journal’s clues. Jara reveals her sister died in a council “energy experiment.”
Twist: A council drone ambushes them; crash-landing strands them in the Wastes. Kael’s prosthetic arm malfunctions, forcing Jara to repair it—symbolic thawing of mutual distrust.
Cliffhanger: They find the egg in a molten cavern… guarded by a feral, half-mechanized Ashborn.
Scene 2: The Ignition (1,500 words)
Setting: The cavern, riddled with crystalline growths and council mining ruins.
Part 4: The Guardian’s Trial
Action: The Ashborn attacks. Kael realizes it’s sentient, its mind corrupted by council control implants.
Ethical Dilemma: Jara wants to kill it; Kael insists on disabling the implants. His inner monologue debates risking their lives for a “monster” vs. redeeming his mentor’s legacy.
Setback: The Ashborn cripples the airship. Kael’s prosthetic is damaged, invoking his fear of helplessness.
Part 5: The Spark
Discovery: Kael uses the journal’s cipher to activate a hidden Ashborn shrine, emitting a frequency that stuns the creature.
Character Growth: Jara sacrifices her heirloom (a resonance grenade) to destroy the implants. The Ashborn calms, its true voice emerging—telepathic, mournful, naming the council’s crimes.
Symbolism: The egg begins to hatch, emitting light that cleanses the smog—a metaphor for historical truth.
Part 6: The Cost
Climax: Council forces arrive, demanding the egg. Kael and Jara fake its destruction but secretly entrust it to the freed Ashborn.
Resolution: Jara stays behind to detonate the cavern, delaying the council. Kael escapes with data proving their corruption.
Final Reflection: Kael, recording his findings, vows to expose the council but questions if idealism justifies Jara’s likely death. The egg’s faint pulse in the distance hints at rebellion.
Narrator’s Voice: Cynical yet introspective, with biting humor toward bureaucracy. Inner thoughts blend academic precision and raw guilt (e.g., comparing Ashborn biology to his own prosthetic: “We’re both relics with someone else’s wiring”).
Themes: Historical erasure, ethical ambiguity in rebellion, symbiosis of organic and machine.
Expanded Details: Luminari caste marks (glowing tattoos tied to social rank), the council’s propaganda hymns blaring through street speakers, the Ashborn’s song-based language.
Prompt: Let's not go with a fantasy angle. Rather go with something much more mundane. We need a believable story, demonstrably written by a living, breathing author. It should read somewhat like a memoir. Give an improved outline.”Revised Outline for a Two-Scene Short Story (6 Parts Total)
Working Title: The Weight of Dust
Scene 1: The Return (1,500 words)
Setting: A sun-bleached, dying Southwestern town (renamed Cielo Rojo), population 814. Rusted pickup trucks, a defunct copper mine, and a diner that still serves pie no one orders. Time: Late 1970s.
Part 1: The Stranger at the Diner
Narrator: Emmett Cale (replaces the scholar), a grizzled, retired ranch hand with a limp from a bull-riding injury. Mid-60s, voice like gravel, wears a faded denim jacket with a missing sleeve button.
Details: Emmett nurses lukewarm coffee at Marlene’s Diner, watching the town’s lone traffic light sway in the wind. He’s returned after 20 years to settle his brother’s estate—a dilapidated salvage yard.
Inner Conflict: Emmett resents the town for ostracizing his brother, Harlan, after a mining accident Harlan allegedly caused. Emmett’s guilt: He never visited.
Inciting Incident: A waitress slips him a note: “They burned his records. Ask about the water.”
Part 2: The Widow’s Warning
New Character: Lydia Reyes (replaces the smuggler), late 50s, widow of the mine foreman. Runs a struggling feed store. Wears her husband’s old wedding ring on a chain.
Tension: Lydia corners Emmett at the salvage yard. Reveals the mine’s accident was a cover-up—faulty pumps flooded the shafts, but the company blamed Harlan. The town’s water is now poisoned.
Worldbuilding: Emmett notices Lydia’s tremor (early stages of arsenic poisoning). She mentions a “ledger” Harlan kept. Their dialogue is terse, laced with shared grief. A stray dog lingers in the background, ribs visible.
Part 3: The Ledger and the Lockbox
Discovery: Emmett finds Harlan’s ledger hidden in a rusted tractor tire. Codes next to dates, dollar amounts. A Polaroid falls out: Harlan and Lydia’s husband, arms slung over each other’s shoulders, circa 1959.
Twist: The salvage yard’s lockbox contains $12,000 in cash and a map of the mine’s tunnels. Emmett’s hands shake—not from age, but rage.
Cliffhanger: A sheriff’s cruiser idles outside the yard. The deputy, baby-faced and sweating, warns Emmett: “Leave what ain’t yours.”
Scene 2: The Reckoning (1,500 words)
Setting: The mine’s abandoned office, papers strewn, a ceiling fan dangling by a wire. A monsoon brews on the horizon.
Part 4: The Truth in the Tunnels
Action: Emmett and Lydia descend into the mine with a flickering flashlight. Lydia coughs violently; Emmett hides his panic.
Ethical Dilemma: They find the faulty pump, branded with a corporate logo. Emmett wants to expose it; Lydia argues the town’s too dependent on the company’s hush-money stipends.
Setback: The deputy arrives, aiming a revolver. Reveals the sheriff’s on the company payroll. “Y’all shouldn’t’ve come back.”
Part 5: The Bargain
Discovery: Emmett recognizes the deputy’s last name—his father died in the accident. Plays on the kid’s guilt: “You wanna end up like your old man? A line in a ledger?”
Character Growth: Lydia slumps against the tunnel wall, exhausted. Emmett, for the first time, touches her shoulder—a flicker of solidarity.
Symbolism: The flashlight dies. Emmett lights a match, revealing faded union posters on the walls: “A Fair Day’s Pay.”
Part 6: The Ashes
Climax: Emmett offers the $12k to the deputy to disappear. Lydia burns the ledger: “Proof won’t fix the water.”
Resolution: Emmett drives out of town at dawn. Stops at the diner. Leaves the remaining cash in the tip jar. The waitress (Marlene’s granddaughter?) stares.
Final Reflection: Emmett’s hands steady on the wheel. He wonders if Harlan would’ve done the same. The stray dog trots alongside his truck for a mile before turning back.
Narrator’s Voice: Sparse, gruff, with undercurrents of regret. Sentences short, favoring physical details over introspection (e.g., “Bad coffee tastes the same everywhere. That’s why I drink it.”). Inner thoughts surface through action: slamming a car door too hard, pocketing a rusted bolt from Harlan’s yard.
Themes: Small-town complicity, the futility of justice, silent masculinity.
Expanded Details: The diner’s jukebox only plays Patsy Cline’s “Crazy.” Emmett’s brother’s jacket smells like motor oil and sage. The mine’s entrance is littered with beer bottles and shotgun shells.
Prompt: Write part [1,2,3,4,5,6].Prompt: We need a more authentic style, showing our narrator's inner voice, showing (NOT telling) their character. We also need to tweak the theme: not too much standard adventure tale. Make it better in every way, so that our audience will love the realistic story. Make the story set in Western Australia. Also, make it a bit more accessible to our readers unfamiliar with the characters. Write part [1,2,3].